January 20, 2010

Review by Sean Patrick ConlonA Guest in All Your Houses by Peter Ludwin

A GUEST IN ALL YOUR HOUSES
by Peter Ludwin

Word Walker Press
1125 1/2 E. California Ave.
Glendale, California 91206
ISBN 0578003902
2009, 102 pp., $13.95
www.wordwalkerpress.com

A Guest in All Your Houses is the first full-length book of poems from Peter Ludwin, and, like many first releases, contains promising work but is troubled by inconsistency. When I started to read, I was happily taken in by the first few poems, specifically “Notes from a Sodbuster’s Wife, Kansas, 1868.” In just the first stanza, Ludwin exhibits a stark empathy with his subject:

What really got us in the end—
we women who didn’t make it,
who withered and blew away in the open—
was the wind. Space, yes, and distance,
too, from neighbors, a piano back in Boston.
But above all, the wind.

Free from pretension and extraneous phrase, the first lines exhibit the aspect of Ludwin’s muse that I find most compelling. The poem in its entirety contains a lot of visual elements we will see again and again in the book: the stark desert landscapes of America, a struggle against and admiration for nature, and a kind of wistful approach to the old west. The next poem, “Bluestem,” a naturalist piece loosely centered on prairie grass in Kansas, continues with with tight and focused verse, this time mixing in a refreshing hilarity, as in this piece from the third stanza:

like lives caught up in a twister.
Shaken, you stumble over debris
brushing pigs and Protestants
from your hair

If the book were to continue to operate at the first few pages’ level of excellence, this collection would have been staggering in its scope. Unfortunately, the poetry lapses into weaker material for much of the book. While most poetry suffers in the absence of personal immediacy, Ludwin appears at his weakest when he is most clearly emotionally involved with the narrative. When writing pieces which he dedicates to his living friends, specifically “At the Grubstake Saloon…,” “Sounds,” and “Incoming,” Ludwin’s narrative feels guarded somehow, perhaps because he is certain it will be read by his subjects. Unable to confront these figures with complete honesty, the poems skim the surface and fail to depict them realistically; they lack the intelligent emotional resonance of poems like “Among the Fundamentalists at Short Creek.”

Similarly, Ludwin’s love of the Southwest and Native American history often takes the form of what is best referred to as “poems that sound like poems.” The weakest points in the book are riddled with exoticism; leaden totemic animals stride across a starry desert evening where sage and juniper abound, saying little about the landscape and much about the author, who in these poems registers a hint of the privilege he clearly despises (see the clichéd send-up “Fry Bread”).

Were this a fourth or fifth collection, I would be writing a very different review, but bearing in mind that this is his first collection, there is nothing fatal about the flaws in Ludwin’s book. They do not speak of an author with nothing to say so much as an author who is hesitant to say, or not used to saying. At his finest, Ludwin clearly possesses “the eye”—that is to say, he sees what makes good poetry and understands how to relay it gracefully. The tendency to display a sort of lame sentimentality when he is aware of his audience is something that will fade, given time and support. In short, I recommend the author more than I do the book. Though this collection does not drown under the weight of its weaker poems, it does sink a little. If we can expect that Ludwin will continue in his work, I would suggest picking up his next volume. I imagine, like a young actor, that the author will come to feel more comfortable in his poetic skin with continued exposure to praise and critique.

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December 30, 2009

Review by Sean Patrick ConlonBrent Goodman - The Brother Swimming Beneath Me

THE BROTHER SWIMMING BENEATH ME
by Brent Goodman

Black Lawrence Press
P.O. Box 327
Theresa, NY 13691
ISBN 1934703397
2009, 63 pp., $14.00
http://www.blacklawrencepress.com/

the brother swimming beneath me is an exciting collection of poems from Brent Goodman. Largely autobiographical, it contains familiar stories of loss and lust, self-discovery and self-loathing, coming of age and coming out. While this is Goodman’s debut collection, it’s important to note his list of previous publications, which reads a lot like a “who’s who” of important literary journals, both online and in print (Poetry, Anti-, Slipstream, The Adirondack Review, and, of course, Rattle, to name a few). While publication in any one of these journals might indicate an excellent poem or two, inclusion in so many established publications, each with their own set of poetic tastes and values, indicates a potent and capable poet who knows how to approach each of his chosen subjects with an appropriate voice.

Indeed, what is most striking about Goodman is his protean flexibility. Throughout the brother swimming beneath me, the style expertly shifts between topic, form, and mood, from aching loss to hilarious self-parody. In “Lice,” the sexual tension of two young boys plays like hot breath on your neck; this piece is immediately followed by the laugh-out-loud funny “First Queer Poem,” an inspired send-up in sonnet form, the last lines of which perfectly parody the queer narrative with delectable pithiness:

How dramatic my coming out, tears blurring my eyes.
Father puts his fork down. My mother feigns surprise.

The rapidly shifting voice continues through the first two thirds of the book, keeping readers on their toes. While the poems can be radically different from one another, there are common observations and values that keep the book from feeling disjointed or schizoid. While the speaker of each poem may alternately be laughing, crying, or experimenting with abstractions, the author remains clearly established as young, queer, male, thoughtful and empathetic.

As the narrative unfolds, more of Goodman’s life story is revealed in tantalizingly small portions. The way in which he has laid out his poems is enticing and original. Rarely in works of poetry do we see use of foreshadowing as potent. For instance, the first time we see Goodman’s titular brother alive in the narrative is in, “Blood Poisoning,” a story of Goodman’s near-death as a small child from an infected dog bite:

…This was my small
death, one which would eventually swallow
him entirely.

Letting this bit of information slip, Goodman does not introduce his brother’s condition until much later in the book, keeping the reader invested in finding out more, and glued to the work. By the time we reach the masterful title piece, we are prepared for the laying bare of Goodman’s burden. This is the axis around which all the other stories are set to spin, and what we find is far from the typical, dramatically wrought moment of painful loss, but rather, a subtle rumination on the way that the dead can permeate our lives, invade our thoughts, haunt us subtly and constantly:

his footprints disappear before I can put down my own
though I can still hear him rising, rising

In this moment, we understand fully the poet’s struggle to be a man in his brother’s eternal shadow. Although he has said nothing outright about his troubled coming of age, we are intimately aware of it.

Following this portion of the book, Goodman loses a little bit of his inventiveness. The last third of the collection is devoted to a series of short prose poems. While any one of these poems would have been an acceptable addition to the existing collection, the inclusion of 20 such poems seems a bit much. The free-thought discussion of various topics, each with a kind of uniformly frenetic narration, is a conceit that grows old by the end of the book, and as such ends the collection on an unfortunate note. That said, the effect of the book is relatively unharmed; while the last section may seem meandering, it cannot diminish the sheer genius of the first two thirds. Overall, this book is a triumph, a truly brilliant first outing with a remarkable new poet.

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